Another 10 for you!
I agree with Slayer-of-trolls, this would be interesting with the poem read over it.
The song and the poem match perfectly, I love it!
I don't really have much to critique here, especially since I have no ground to stand on!
Oh, and before I forget, I'll throw in an obligatory "k33p up t3h g00d w0rk" just because.
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